作业帮英语自我介绍帮我看看啊有错英语自我介绍、请英语好的帮我看看啊有错、帮涐改改、谢谢hello,Everyone.My name is XX.NOW I am 16 years old .I was born in XX.There are 3 people in my family ,my parent and I .we love eac
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英语自我介绍帮我看看啊有错英语自我介绍、请英语好的帮我看看啊有错、帮涐改改、谢谢hello,Everyone.My name is XX.NOW I am 16 years old .I was born in XX.There are 3 people in my family ,my parent and I .we love eac
英语自我介绍帮我看看啊有错
英语自我介绍、请英语好的帮我看看啊有错、
帮涐改改、谢谢
hello,Everyone.My name is XX.NOW I am 16 years old .I was born in XX.There are 3 people in my family ,my parent and I .we love each other.I often play computer and listen to music .I want travel around world when i grow up.
hello,Everyone.My name is XX.NOW I am 16 years old .I was born in XX.There are 3 people in my family ,my parents and I .we love each other.I often play computer and listen to music.I want to travel around world when i grow up.
这样？
其实涐也觉得最后一句怪怪的- -
涐不知道最后一句要写什么，所以就随便加一句- -、
必须八句么、没办法、原谅涐英语不好、
英语自我介绍帮我看看啊有错英语自我介绍、请英语好的帮我看看啊有错、帮涐改改、谢谢hello,Everyone.My name is XX.NOW I am 16 years old .I was born in XX.There are 3 people in my family ,my parent and I .we love eac
hello,Everyone.My name is XX. NOW【去掉,没有这么用的】 I am 16 years old .I was born in XX. There are 3 people in my family ,my parent【+s,此处用复数】 and I .we love each other【加上very much就更顺畅了】. I often play computer【play computer是错误搭配,可以说use computer】 and listen to music 【with it】.I want 【to】travel around 【此处缺少the】world when i grow up.
祝你的梦想成真!
最后一句有点，嗨,大家好。我的名字是XX。现在我16岁,我出生在XX。我家有三口人,我父母和我。我们彼此相爱。我经常玩电脑,听音乐,我想要环游世界,当我长大。
parent 改成 parents
want后面加to
hello 后面是逗号，Everyone 的E
要小写。。
in my family 后面加个they are my parents。。会流畅点
listen to music 后面加个时间状语吧。
再补充点别的啊什么，譬如你的爱好啊。
哎呀，打字不容易啊， 给点分啵~~
I want to travel around the world when I grow up、