六级作文,求修改～本人征战六级多次,但都以失败而告终.但每次都以几分的差距而落败,这次又走上了备考的路线,写六级作文一篇,希望高手能帮忙看看有什么错误,With the develop of information tech

六级作文,求修改～本人征战六级多次,但都以失败而告终.但每次都以几分的差距而落败,这次又走上了备考的路线,写六级作文一篇,希望高手能帮忙看看有什么错误,With the develop of information tech
六级作文,求修改～
本人征战六级多次,但都以失败而告终.但每次都以几分的差距而落败,这次又走上了备考的路线,写六级作文一篇,希望高手能帮忙看看有什么错误,
With the develop of information technology,more and more e-books have appeared.Taking a look around,we can find examples too numerous to list:“Thank you”“Star”are very famous internet novels.
Some people believe that e-books will take place the tradional ones.They maintain that e-books are very convenience.Everyone can download it from net.They also argue that e-books are cheaper.In other word,each one can afford it,and it will never cost your much money.
But others may not agree.They hold the view that real books will never been take place.They think that tradional ones have a special smell.When you read traditional ones ,you will enjoy the smell.In additional,some one in favour of putting mamy books on their bookshelf.They belive it is a symbol of their professional.
In my view,I agree with the latter opinion.I bleieve the new one will never take place the traditional one,and I enjoy the special smell of it

六级作文,求修改～本人征战六级多次,但都以失败而告终.但每次都以几分的差距而落败,这次又走上了备考的路线,写六级作文一篇,希望高手能帮忙看看有什么错误,With the develop of information tech
这是敝人改过后的作文：
With the development of information and technology,more and more e-books appear.Taking a look around,we can find numerously famous e-books such as“Thank you”and“Star”.
Some people believe that e-book will take the place of the tradional one.They maintain that e-book is very convenient.Everyone can download it from the Internet.What's more,e-book is cheaper.In other words,each one can afford to it,and it will never cost your much money.
But others may not agree.They hold the view that real books will never be replaced.For one thing,tradional books have a special smell.When you read traditional ones ,you can enjoy the smell.For another,some people are in favour of putting mamy books on their bookshelves,for it is a symbol of their hobbies and they can use the books whenever they want.
In my view,I agree with the latter opinion.I bleieve the new one will never take place of the traditional one,and I enjoy the special smell of traditional books.
建议你不要用太多的代词,有时会指代不清的,还有,不要只用一种复合句式,你的文章里几乎被宾语从句给包围了,要句式多变.还有就是连接词太少.再次强调这只是个人建议哦.

we can find examples too numerous to list
这句话写得不是很好。不如改成：The list could go on and on.表示这样的例子不胜枚举。
Some people believe that e-books will take place the tradional ones.
可改成：some people hold ...

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we can find examples too numerous to list
这句话写得不是很好。不如改成：The list could go on and on.表示这样的例子不胜枚举。
Some people believe that e-books will take place the tradional ones.
可改成：some people hold a belief that...要好一些。
In additional改为：in addition
其他还行。总之，我觉得六级作文还是得好好看模板。这会对你有很大帮助呢！
本人当时六级的时候就是看了2天的模板，也没练着就去考了，还考了104分，所以我认为还是相当有用的。加油咯~~~

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1 development
2 we can find examples too numerous to list
we can find so many examples to list
3 are 后边加both
4 take place the tradional ones///take the tradional ones' place
5 net/...

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1 development
2 we can find examples too numerous to list
we can find so many examples to list
3 are 后边加both
4 take place the tradional ones///take the tradional ones' place
5 net////internet
6 argue////stress
7 in another word
8 you///cost sb sth
9 real...traditional(对了，前边这个单词还打错了)
10 been///be
11 replaced
12 some one are in favour of
13 many believe写错了
14 believe还是写错了，就算是believe 中间也藏着个lie 你就写不错了
15还是take place 这的问题
总体来说你这篇写的挺不错的，结构很合理，语言也不错，还有用到了很多句型。其实我一直觉得英语作文内容不是很重要，最重要的是句型。多记一些句型，到时候直接往上套，又省时间又漂亮。
祝你这次顺利拿下六级，加油。
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不知道六级程度要怎么样。。。但是还是有太多拼写错误，用词错误和语法错误。。。
严重的：take place 错，
名词，动词， 形容词的混淆， 比如：develop -> development, professional -> profession or professionalism, convenience -〉convenient, 等等
拼写错误：belive，...

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不知道六级程度要怎么样。。。但是还是有太多拼写错误，用词错误和语法错误。。。
严重的：take place 错，
名词，动词， 形容词的混淆， 比如：develop -> development, professional -> profession or professionalism, convenience -〉convenient, 等等
拼写错误：belive， bleieve， mamy ， 等等
还有你的every , each, some 的用法
但是文章的内容很不错。。。值得夸奖。。
帮你粗粗改了下，尽量没有变你的句式和意思，你看看，可能也有错。。
With the development of information technology,more and more e-books have appeared.Taking a look around,we can find examples too numerous to list. For example,“Thank you”and “Star”are very famous Internet novels.
Some people believe that e-books will replace the tradional ones.They claim that e-books are very convenient.Everyone can download them from the Internet.They also argue that e-books are cheaper.In other words,everyone can afford it, and it will never cost you much money.
But others may not agree.They hold the view that real books will never been replaced.They think that tradional ones have a special scent.When you read traditional books,you will enjoy the scent.In additional,some are in favour of putting many books on their bookshelves. They believe it is a symbol of their professions.
In my view, I agree with the latter opinion. I believe the e-book will never take the place of the traditional books, and I enjoy their special scent.

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1段1句：develop改为development
2段1句：‘take place the tradional ones' 改为 replace the traditional ones 或 take the place of...
2段2句：convenience 改为convenient
2段3句：net 改为 Internet
2段4句：word改为 wor...

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1段1句：develop改为development
2段1句：‘take place the tradional ones' 改为 replace the traditional ones 或 take the place of...
2段2句：convenience 改为convenient
2段3句：net 改为 Internet
2段4句：word改为 words
2段5句：much改为too much
3段1句：been take place 改为 be replaced
3段3句：in additional改为 additionally some one 改为 some are
bookshelf 要用复数
3段4句：全改 they believe that they symbolize their professional knowledge
4段：one 改成ones
以上是语法和语义上出现的疏漏，总体而言文字还显过于单调，几乎没有从句，不见长句和高级词汇。同志，要努力啊！

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