我的这篇英语短文有错误吗?One day,Tim and Ben are going to shopping in the supermarket.They are looking at a man in the supermarket.Tim asks,"What is he taking?" "He is taking a bottle of juice."Ben says.Then,the man is waiting for a bus o

我的这篇英语短文有错误吗?One day,Tim and Ben are going to shopping in the supermarket.They are looking at a man in the supermarket.Tim asks,"What is he taking?" "He is taking a bottle of juice."Ben says.Then,the man is waiting for a bus o
我的这篇英语短文有错误吗?
One day,Tim and Ben are going to shopping in the supermarket.They are looking at a man in the supermarket.Tim asks,"What is he taking?" "He is taking a bottle of juice."Ben says.Then,the man is waiting for a bus on the road.He is reading a newspaper.Tim and Ben are talking to a policewoman."That man is a theif!" "Really?" The policewoman is taking the man,they are going to the police station.Tim and Ben are very happy.
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我的这篇英语短文有错误吗?One day,Tim and Ben are going to shopping in the supermarket.They are looking at a man in the supermarket.Tim asks,"What is he taking?" "He is taking a bottle of juice."Ben says.Then,the man is waiting for a bus o
正在进行时用的太多了.如果是讲故事的话,用过去式比较好.现在时的话
One day,Tim and Ben are shoping in the supermarket.They see a man in the supermarket.Tim ask:" What is he taking?" "He is taking a bottle of juice." Ben says.Then,the man waits for a bus on the road while reading a newspaper.Tim and Ben tell a policeman that the man is a thief."Really?" The policeman takes the man to the police station.Tim and Ben are very happy.
我觉得过去式会比较好点.

going to shopping 去to
a newspaper 去a
The policewoman is taking the man is taking改为takes
are going 改为go

One day,Tim and Ben were shopping in a supermarket.They saw a man in the supermarket.He was putting something into his pocket .Tim asked,"What is he doing?" "He is stealing a bottle of juice."Ben answ...

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One day,Tim and Ben were shopping in a supermarket.They saw a man in the supermarket.He was putting something into his pocket .Tim asked,"What is he doing?" "He is stealing a bottle of juice."Ben answered.They followed him to go out the supermarket .While the man was waiting for a bus on the road,he was reading a newspaper.Tim and Ben told a policewoman "That man is a theif！" The policewoman caught the man and took him to the police station.Tim and Ben were very happy.

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